Previous Winning Essays: Independence Day Writing Challenge

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For the last two years, Hopewell Furnace National Historic Site, in collaboration with the Friends of Hopewell Furnace, have conducted an essay writing contest for high schoolers in the local school districts. In 2023 the contest was expanded to middle schoolers. Each year a different prompt has been used for the contest. Below are the past years’ winning submissions.

Along with cash prizes provided by the Friends of Hopewell Furnace, the students essays were read at the annual Independence Day commemoration ceremony in the park.

 

2023 Essay Winners

2023 prompt: What does the phrase “created equal” mean to you?

High School Group

1st Place – Simran Sahoo
Downingtown STEM Academy

I constantly question why, if we all are supposedly created equal, have been fighting since the beginning to prove our equality. Why have our history textbooks served as not just portals into the past but warning signals of how quickly our land can split into two? Why must African American children huddle around their mothers desperately wondering why the golden rule - treat others the way you want to be treated - applied to them, but not their classmates? And why do I, to this day, shudder every time the TV flickers to the evening news channel, terrified to glimpse which sobbing sister I will see hunched over the body of an innocent child whose skin color forced her to be in the wrong place, wrong time, every single day?

The phrase “created equal” serves to remind me, that while we all entered the world with voices that could only murmur unintelligible gurgles, some of us grew up to use our voices to hurt those that do not look like them. That while we all waved around our tiny fists, unable to defend ourselves from people’s cooing and poking, some of our hands learned how to perfectly fit around a gun to wield against strangers. That while we all immediately fell to the ground after taking our first steps, some of us left them all alone when they tried to stand back up. Because even though we were all born equal, nothing stops individuals from refusing to treat each other as such.

The Fourth of July commemorates America’s bravery in breaking away from Great Britain’s clutches. We celebrate those colonists and Founding Fathers whose battles have paved the path for this ground that we so proudly stand on. The fireworks that will crackle across the skies of fifty different states are as loud as the gunshots that allowed us to become our own country with our own ideologies and our own democratic system.

Yet how can we openly honor the history of our country when our present is so flawed? How can we look into the eyes of our fellow neighbors and celebrate a holiday that seems to exist for only a select few in our nation and reminds marginalized groups of the joy they cannot partake in?

The phrase “created equal” follows me to my biology class where I sit and pore over skeletal diagrams of body anatomy, and take detailed notes about cellular respiration. It lingers on the living room table as I shuffle through flashcards of the 8 characteristics all living things need to survive, wondering where the cards “equality” and “kindness” went. It haunts me in my sleep as I lie awake, wondering how we all possess the same biological components and are made of the same substances, but only some of us feel safe in our country.

What gives me hope, however, is that there are still so many of us that live life with kindness, and so, we all have the power to be kind.

2nd Place Abigail Smith
Owen J. Roberts High School

Equality of Man and Nature

Equality is balance: the balance of the solid, undefined land and the turbulent waves in the curious oceans. The fresh, blooming flowers are equivalent to the solid, towering trees. The balance of nature is equivalent to the equality of man, for the existence of man is nature itself. The transcendentalism and enlightenment ideals in Ralph Waldo Emerson’s Self Reliance establishes the importance of independent thought, which pushes individuals to stand against conformity. Each human being carries a unique set of qualities, abilities, and talents; these people act as puzzle pieces, working together to create one beautiful picture.

All men are created equal, no matter the race, gender, income, or religion of the individual. When this equality is abused, perseverant catalysts protest, boycott, write, and speak in order to work towards the equality inherently found in nature. In Martin Luther King’s, “Letter from a Birmingham Jail,” King explains the difference between just and unjust laws. Just laws are laws that are to be followed, for they protect the rights and the safety of American citizens while unjust laws are meant to be broken through direct action and civil disobedience. Brave individuals fought for the establishment of legislation that protects the equality of all people. With relentless work, civil rights activists pressured congress to pass The Fifteenth Amendment, The Civil Rights Act of 1964, and The Voting Rights Act of 1965. Without these brave souls the words “created equal,” in the Declaration of Independence, would just be pretense.

Like long, stretching branches of a tree, The United State’s representative democracy is separated into branches: executive, legislative, and judicial. As explained in Federalist Paper 51, the government must be given power to govern the people, but also the power to govern themselves because if men were angels, no government would be necessary. This structure of government allows the expression, “created equal,” to be upheld by protecting against the tyranny of the majority and sustaining minority rights. The judicial branch includes the supreme court, which uses judicial review in order to uphold The Constitution: the supreme rule of the land. In Brown v. The Board of Education, the precedent of “separate but equal,” established by Plessy v. Ferguson was overturned, for the inherent separation of race is harmful to creation and equality of man.

Martin Luther King also believed that it was the oppressed that needed to fight for their rights since the oppressor never grants equality without pressure. Women not only had to fight for their right to vote and to education, but also for the right to be themselves. I am so grateful for the women that fought for my right to vote with the implementation of the 19th Amendment and the equal opportunities I have access to with the passage of Title IX.

The sun is equivalent to the moon and predators are equivalent to prey. The world works in a perfect balance, and man must follow because nature and human nature are more alike than people may think.

3rd Place - Christopher Landis, Jr.
Daniel Boone High School

The circumstances under which Jefferson and the other founders penned the Declaration was one of much turmoil and concern in the colonies. The document was an open rebuke on the far-off government of Great Britain, and aired many of the grievances felt by the colonists. Sitting in the opening lines of this document is perhaps its most powerful line. "All men are created equal". In only five words, the founders created the ideal for a nation that would go to not only break from its oppressors, but bring ideas of personal liberty to the rest of the world. To me, this line not only explains a fundamental importance of humanity, but also creates the single most defining principle of a nation that became a bastion of freedom and liberty.

For hundreds of years before the founding of the United States, the feudal system had dominated much of the world. This system created a structure where the many were ruled by the few, and class was the defining trait of a person. In five words, this line rejects this long-held system with a "self-evident" truth, the common humanity of all. A commonality that transcends the class or status of an individual, it gives a voice to humanity, a voice which exclaims joy at the liberty and freedom of all. The line both strengthens humanity as a whole, tying everyone together under the banner of personhood, but in the same breath glorifies the individual. It gives each the same freedoms and liberties as every other, but also gives each individual the freedom to live a life that disregards class, race, economic status, and all else. This duality is what makes those words so powerful, it unites but doesn't control, embraces but refuses to crush. It was this ideal that went on to guide the policy of the nation that emerged from it, and throughout its history America has been looked at as a land of escape from tyranny and a stalwart defender of the equality of all.

Middle School Group

1st Place – Archisha Chakraborty
Lionville Middle School

What is True Equality?

The phrase "created equal" is a fundamental principle that has been enshrined in the Declaration of Independence. To me, it means that every human being is born with inherent worth and dignity, regardless of race, gender, religion, or any other characteristic. It means that everyone should have an equal opportunity to pursue their dreams and aspirations without facing discrimination or prejudice.

In practice, however, not everyone is treated equally. Discrimination and prejudice still exist in our society today. The fight for equality is ongoing and requires continuous effort from all individuals.

To this day, women occasionally work different positions than men, jobs like maintaining the workplace. Some people refuse to accept people of different cultural backgrounds, people of color, or people with different religious beliefs. There were wars to allow freedoms to be shared with everyone equally, thus lives were lost, yet some people still do not get the same rights. Often, they are modified by people who are not as mindful of true inclusivity.

To truly live up to the principle of being "created equal," we must work towards eliminating discrimination and promoting inclusivity. We must strive to create a world where everyone has access to the same opportunities like education, healthcare, employment, and basic human rights. When the above listed is properly executed, we will officially have a "more perfect union".

2nd Place – Yunni Wawrzyniak
Marsh Creek 6th Grade Center

Being created equal are words tossed around every day. But I wonder all the time, if they are intended to be true. I find it sad that we need to teach this world that diversity isn’t a bad thing, when the outcome is only a tiny portion of people accepts others being different. I am Asian, and at eleven years old, I have not yet reached my wise peak. However, I remember when I was younger and I heard of the killing of George Floyd. The first thing that swam into my mind was, “Oh, good thing I’m not black.” And as much as I regret that now, what I was realizing then was something else: I am Asian. This snap of reality brought uncertainty, and doubt with it, nothing like I had ever felt before. I remember thinking that I looked nothing like the rest of my family, and I took this in as if I was lower, in a way, to them. I like to think of racism as a wave that crashes on the sandy shore. It comes unexpectedly, and leaves just as fast. You could look and think “Oh it’s the same as always” when really the power is still there, left in empty air. This is how I feel when I think about not being white. Being called “Ching Chong” or getting teased for my almond eyes. Those sad, racist, people help me realize that even though I will never be white, with blond hair and blue eyes, that I am me, and that is even better. I have learned that people will point out any difference and say it’s a flaw. Being created equal means that you don’t doubt yourself in this world, just because you have a different race or ethnicity.

3rd Place – Nithya Vanacharla
Lionville Middle School

The phrase “created equal” is something that has brought and continues to bring millions of people across the world to America. Within these millions of people are my two immigrant parents. At the young age of 24, they both immigrated to the United States of America. They wanted to provide the best life for their kids and future generations. But, most of all, my parents wanted their children to have the same opportunities as the other kids in the United States. America is known for its constitution which states “all men are created equal”. To my Indian parents, that is what mattered the most. The idea that no one person had utmost control over them was incredibly appealing. It did not matter whether my parents were wealthy or white, their kids would be put into the same daycares as everyone else. Rather, it all depended on your talents and abilities.

To me, the phrase “created equal” is the assurance that no one has a higher value than me solely based on where they come from. What truly matters is the work you put in and what you show the world. That is what led my parents here, and it’s one of the main reasons why I’m living in America. It’s the reason why I get to go to a good school and get a great education. It’s why I can walk around my neighborhood park alone or with friends, and not worry about danger. Without America being “created equal”, my life would have started in India, where day-to-day living conditions are drastically different. I would not have had so many of the amazing opportunities I have gotten to experience in my life thus far, such as having the opportunity to participate in essay contests, like this one.

 

2022 Essay Winners:

2022 Prompt: What does the Declaration of Independence mean to you?

1st Place – Celia Kerr
Owen J. Roberts High School


To most, the Declaration of Independence is a symbol of freedom, of liberty, of our countryas a whole, but in its status as a symbol, I feel that many have neglected to remember what it is really about. While I do appreciate its symbolism, it is the full body and content of the document that compels me to admire and remember it.

The Declaration of Independence is not a negotiation, but a statement. The colonists told the king that they were no longer a part of Great Britain. Not only did they make this daring statement, but a large section of the document is a list of grievances against the king. My history teacher once called the Declaration “America’s break-up letter,” but I think it slightly outweighs that title. Imagine breaking up with a significant other and then sending them a list of every single reason why just to justify yourself. Now that is bold.

It is this boldness that I personally hold in such high esteem. From the very beginning, thefounders of our country refused to be oppressed, or be given any less than they deserved. They had the courage and resolve to attack the leader of the most powerful empire in the world, calling his actions “scarcely paralleled in the most barbarous ages, and totally unworthy the Head of a civilized nation.” Yes, they called the King of England uncivilized as he was currently sending his heavily armed military straight to their doorsteps. Though possibly seeming unnecessarily dramatic and provocative, the founding fathers at this time were simply unleashing their fiery passion to do what they believed was right, all in the name of “life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness.”

Ultimately, the United States was liberated from Britain (in case you didn’t know), but it isno secret that we still have quite a long way to go in providing all people with an equal chance at the pursuit of happiness. Every day, people are denied rights on the basis of who they love or how they identify themselves. People face microaggressions in the workplace simply because of the color of their skin or how they speak. People are hurt and killed for reasons they can’t control and should never be made to be ashamed of.

When put that way, the world seems pretty bleak, but then I remember the passionatewords that marked the beginning of our sovereign nation. At our very core, we are still the country that freed ourselves and sent Britain a list of grievances rather than a list of requests;the country that reduced a king to a barbarian; the country that will stop at nothing to enact change for the good of its people. To me, the Declaration is proof that we as a country will always have the capacity to oppose and overcome oppression so long as the best of us continue fighting with the bold and unyielding vigor that this country was founded upon.

 

2nd Place Abigail Smith
Owen J. Roberts High School

The fifty, bespangled stars and the thirteen, colonial stripes blow freely in the wind of The United States of America. The miniature flags fill the streets of patriotic parades, the hands of children with bright eyes to match their futures, and the hearts of all men and women who have served their country. Each Fourth of July is a magical day with endless gratification: the delectable smells of barbeques, the gorgeous bursts of color that fill the sky, and a feeling of appreciation. It is on this day that we celebrate the birth of our country and recognize the endless privilege we have to live in America. On July 4th, 1776, the founding fathers signed the Declaration of Independence. They were tired of being taxed without established representation, and they wanted to bleed freedom: the freedom to live how they wanted, be who they were, and govern themselves to the fullest extent. The risk that the founding fathers took, allows the individuals of America to be who they are. A British Monarchy leaves no place for Democracy, but when people are given the right to vote, they are given an equal opportunity and voice. I am so honored to live in a country where this is possible and where people can feel safe, secure, and free. The Declaration of Independence is a symbol of patriotism, freedom, dedication, and honor.

Of course, the words that inhabit my heart the most are, “All men are created equal.” Although these words did not include everyone in 1776, they include everyone today. It does not matter whether an individual is black or white, male or female, or part of the LGBTQ+ community. Even when the rights of certain marginalized groups are challenged, the freedom of speech and expression allows people to voice their opinions and stand up for what they believe in. This might not have been possible without the courage of Thomas Jefferson, the intelligence of Benjamin Franklin, or the diligence of John Adams. The Declaration of Independence led people to live a life of freedom, and people take this for granted.

Next time, on the Fourth of July, take a moment and step back from the endless macaroni salad or the children splashing in the pool. Instead, reflect on the sacrifices of millions who allowed The United States of America to become the country it is today. Remember the vast amount of hurdles that past generations had to make in order for us to live independently from British rule.

Imagine going out on a limb and sacrificing everything just to have a voice. The founding fathers put everything on the line to stand up for what was right. They experienced salutary neglectfrom their mother country, and they decided to do what was best, despite the challenges. I am so glad to have the freedom to be myself, and I am so honored to be an American.

 

3rd Place - Danica Leister
Daniel Boone High School

The Declaration of Independence means a lot to many people, but I find it particularly important to me as a woman. Ironically the word woman is never mentioned in the Declaration of Independence, but its statements were able to give women solid support in their efforts to gain the same rights as men. The statements in the declaration that gave women the right to pursue equal rights can be summarized as the right given to the people to alter or abolish a destructive and harmful government that causes suffering to its people. For far too many years women were perceived as less than men and not deserving of the rights and laws granted to men in the United States. Women have had their voices silenced and their thoughts and opinions unheard and unrepresented. Finally after suffering for so long a women’s rights convention was held in Seneca Falls on July 19-20th, 1848.

During the women’s rights convention, Elizabeth Cady Stanton spoke her draft of the Declaration of Sentiments. This Declaration follows the text and composition of the Declaration of Independence, but includes changes to the document to demonstrate the women’s efforttoward equality and dedication to be taken seriously. Small changes to the document can beseen in the Declaration of Sentiments such as, “We hold these truths to be self-evident that all men and women are created equal;” This line in Elizabeth’s speech show how the Declaration of Independence inspired the women of the 1840s and 1850s to seek equality and to be heard.The most important part of Elizabeth Candy Stanton’s speech was the list of grievances. In theoriginal Declaration of Independence, a list of grievances was created by all in attendance at thedrafting of this document written by Thomas Jefferson. This list of grievances demonstrated to the king of England that the Colonies had no tolerance for injustice and abuse given by, in their words, a tyrannical government. The Declaration of Sentiments’ list of grievances demonstrates how women were treated unfairly and how the ideals of the Declaration of Independence wereable to influence the action of the women’s rights movement. Looking back on what women had to face in the past, I find it hard to imagine my life in the situations and societal expectations that were set upon these women. In Elizabeth’s grievances, she shared many injustices and demoralizing experiences she and other women have faced. One grievance that would particularly affect me is the grievance, “He has denied her the facilities for obtaining a thorough education - all colleges being closed against her.” Most of my life is dedicated to my school work and preparing for college and if I were denied access to higher education my future goals and dreams would be crushed. The Declaration of Independence allowed women to draft their declaration and be able to use the original document as a way to prove why they should have the right to vote and their voices be heard. My life might be entirely different if the Declaration of Independence was never created, and I am forever grateful to the men and women in the past that were able to fight for the rights that I have today.

Last updated: March 10, 2024

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